Shed no tear- O shed no tear,
The flower will bloom another year.
Weep no more- O weep no more,
Everything shall heal, all that is sore.
Dry your eyes- O dry your eyes,
Life is full of some lows and many more highs.
Failure is a challenge-accept it,
What went wrong, check and correct it.
Quit peaceful sleep till you find out,
Why the failure did came about.
Come forth again will more strength and will,
Small shall seem all the mountains and hills.
Trumpet of triumph sounds for those who tried,
Not for those who gave up and cried.
8 comments:
very encouraging
though i didnt understand the title
Nice work Mr.Ashim.
I think your take on life is extremely commendable.
Ur writing can inspire some souls into submission to the eternal truth that life is all about trying.
Thou who didnt try didnt live.
Mr.Shayan,the title is a german text which in english means "I am what I am ".
Although I couldnt figure out the relevance wrt this "poem",but maybe Mr.Ashim had his ideas.
Ahhh sorry.
I am what I am is the title of his blog,not his poem.
The title of the poem is "On Failure".
Appologies Mr. Ashim for doubting your sense of relevance.
Quite inspiring and encouraging.....fills the mind with a sense of positivity...nice work dude...keep writing...!!
yep sorry ashim for confusing the blog's name with the poem
anyway, i forgot to write that ur poem is reminescent of rudyard kipling's work "if"
nice job
hi maaan!...let me criticize you a little bit! for i am a master of that . well yours is an attempted sonnet! 14 lines!...but actually this style, popularly called a "couplet" (a-a:b-b)is generally not used in sonnets.rather you can try the general rhyming schemes used in sonnets.like,Petrarch's rhyme, which consists of an octet and a sestet.(total 14)the octet consists of two quatrains a-b-a-b or a-b-b-a.the sestet generally rhymes c-d-e-c-d-e. though other variants are also available.or you can try a spencerian which goes like a-b-a-b c-d-c-d e-f-e-f g-g.
actually these rhymes add much to the matter of the sonnets.where couplets lighten the content of a sonnet this petrarchan or shakespearean or spencerian styles graviten your content.
and as for the content the sonnets generally deal with problem-solution kind of thing.the early petrarchan sonnets insisted that the octet tells about the problem and sestet contains solution.however later on the "reflexive mood" in sonnets became more prominent than anything else.But generally it is not extremely emotional kind of stuff. it will be nice to tailor the content that way, isn't it.
okkay!...no more criticism.your effort has been very encouraging.get going!..expect a better one next time!
Goodies.
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